This is a companion piece to "Kore" below.
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8 comments:
This one seemed harder to me...not so much a renegotiation as a closing off.
Couldn't disagree more. This rewriting is an opening up--what could me more open-ended than ending mid-sentence? Anyway, this poem works well contrapuntally with the "easier" poem--they require each other "part waiting part."
Grammatical open-endedness and emotional open-endedness are two entirely different things, and in fact the first can easily serve the second. Look at the word choice --
rage
snare
spite
damnation
gone askancematch
bites fits
these words all carry with them very negative emotional connotations. The incomplete sentence at the end sounds more like a lapse into a bitter or frustrated silence rather than an opening up into anything at all, much less anything positive. The silence in this case is deafening.
I believe I'll just keep my authorial mouth shut, difficult though it is ... fascinating to follow the discussion, though!
:)
me
Ha...authorial intent is irrelevant anyhow, especially for poems like these. They don't so much mean as feel -- they create a web of emotional associations with no clear, discreet object.
You're just another reader :)
One other thing -- can't really say a poem is "open-ended" then say this poem "requires" another poem to be understood. That position of "requiring" requires a discreet, closed reading of the poem that makes it dependent upon the other poem.
I think the two poems can be read contrapuntally but can be read independently as well. Shakespeare's sonnets are like that.
well, as another reader then ... ;) What's necessarily negative about those words? Passionate, yes ... but I think you're seeing bitterness in a frustration that may also have more pleasurable implications. Ambivalence I'll give you. This is Persephone, after all (right?) speaking. How could she be other than ambivalent? Damnation in the context of becoming the Queen of the Dead could, after all, have its perks! But I love that both of you have such different readings, while mine differs as well. And here I thought it was just a little exercise! (Coy much?)
Mmm, almost forgot: how about these words?
seeds
offers
attentive dreams
promise
fruit
fits (a perfect?)
loves (and I like "bites," too!)
They aren't negated by the other words, simply offered alongside them. In my humble opinion.
one last post, and I'll shut up after ... Johan asked for a bit of clarification of my process in writing core out of Kore. I'm not sure how well I can really get into that, my process is really intuitive, but for me, Kore is the narrative, and core is the swoon. Make of that what you will.
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